this written piece is intended for the early adult age group-19-24
At the Pape stop, he arrived on the bus. He shall be named Noah. In Noah's right hand he is holding onto a bus pass card,valid for February. Looks like Noah will be needing a new one soon as February is almost over. From the bus pass it seems that Noah often travels frequently. Stopping in front of the bus driver, Noah flashes his bus pass to him in order to allow him to sit on the bus and carry him to his destination. Let's see where Noah is headed on this journey.
After flashing his card to the bus driver, Noah turns and walks to the first available seat at the front of the bus. He sits down looking calm and collective. He removes his backpack from his shoulders and places it on top of his lap. The young man who looks to be in his early 20's seems to be a student at Ryerson university. Noah is wearing long, grey pants with a long band dropping from his left pocket that has Ryerson and it's colors on it. Noah is also wearing a black long winter jacket. To complete his outfit, he is wearing black, formal shoes. Noah is looking ahead of the bus driver's window in anticipation. It seems that he maybe looking forward to reach his destination. From Noah's appearance that destination seems to be Ryerson university. Noah definitely is quite punctual.
Looking at Noah, leaves one with the impression of uniqueness. His handsome face is definitely not one you can forget easily. His piercing, dark brown eyes are wondering around the bus and then to the scenery outside the window he is faced with in front of him. His light brown complexion smooth skin contrasts against the white collar sticking out from under his jacket. As Noah's average size body built sits on the seat of the bus, he takes out a book, opens it to the middle and begins reading it. It can be clearly seen that Noah is interested in learning and definitely likes to read.
Noah seems to be a very welcoming and friendly guy. his expression of calamity says that he is an easy-going, stress free type of guy. He seems to love the environment he is living in as well as the people around him. Looking at Noah, it is hard to determine whether or not he is living independently or with his family. He appears to be so mature and adult-like. However on the other hand, when noticing that he attends university and travels by the bus, it's likely that he won't be able to afford and balance out rent, work, a car, university and food supplies. Most likely he lives with his family, probably his parents. It appears to be that the reason he takes the bus is probably because his working parents use their car(s) to get to work. Plus with university tuition, buying a car would be too much of an expense for Noah. One can almost be certain that Noah lives with family because just by looking into his eyes, he seems to be so loving and caring. You can almost tell that he is quite attached to his family.
Noah's eyes continue to skim the pages of his book while the East York school stop approaches. His body language obviously does not say that this is his stop to get off at. In fact Noah seems to be making himself even more comfortable in his seat taking of his long black jacket and placing it on top of his backpack. It seems the journey ahead for this stranger still has a long way to go.
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I like the percpective, it's almost as if I'm sitting on the bus with this man. Though, it's not written in proper paragraph format. I also didn't feel that there was enough revealed about the character's feelings.
You described Noah really well. All I have to say is try not to repeat the characters name too much because it sounds repatative. Other then that it was really well written. You should be a novelist;)
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